老雅认为，6分作文的核心在于逻辑通顺，句子错误不多，而7分及以上作文不仅要逻辑通顺，而且要写出一定的个性。什么是个性？那就是你能写出来，而其他多数烤鸭写不出来的内容。如果有一句精彩的语言，你能写出来，其他很多考生也能写出来，那这句话就没有个性，这样的作文就难以拿到7分以上的高分。很多同学没有意识到这一点，过于依靠模板，结果自以为写得不错，最后得分却很不理想。实现个性化写作的方法很多，今天老雅想分享一下如何给雅思作文一个充满个性的开头段。
首先，力争避免以下开头模板：
（1） With the development of...
（2）Nowadays there is a heated topic about...
（3）When it comes to..., different people have different views... Some people think..., but others think...
（4）When asked about..., many people think...
这些模板都属于考官比较厌恶的陈词滥调，以它们开头的作文，第一印象就会比较差。
其次，要有“描写问题/现象”的意识，而不是简单“提出问题”：
（1）引用电视或文学作品描写现象+拟回答的问题
【例】Some people believe there are intelligent life forms existing on other planets and it is better to send messages to them, but others think it is a bad idea because it is very dangerous to do this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
【学生开头】
Nowadays, there is a heated topic about whether we should send messages to intelligent life on other plants. Some people believe that we should do that, but others suspect that doing that is very dangerous.（模板开头法）
【老雅范文】
Our imagination about beings on other planets has never stopped and reached its climax in such movie series like “Star Wars” and “Star Trek” in 1960s and 1970s. If other life forms do exist, an idea I strongly support, should we, as human beings on the Earth, try to reach out and communicate with them? （个性开头法）
【评】老雅开始即描述我们对外星人的想象，并引出了《星球大战》这样具体个性化的电视节目，然后提出是否应该与外星人联系这个问题。与平淡无味的模板相比，其优势显而易见。
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（2）以叙述方式描写现象+拟批驳的靶子
【例】Some people think they have right to use as much fresh water as they want, but others believe government should control the use of fresh water as it is limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
【某范文网】
When it comes to the issue about the use of fresh water, some people argue that they are entitled to consume fresh water without limitation, but others believe that the use of fresh water should be controlled by governments strictly.
【老雅范文】
We all, humans and non-humans alike, need fresh water for our survival. The issue is that a lot of people always try to make a case for their wasteful use of fresh water, arguing that they have money, and more importantly right to buy and use as much fresh water as they want. Their constant rhetoric is something like, “so what? Don’t worry, for we have enough fresh water! ”
【评】老雅先从我们需要淡水开始，然后以叙述的方式提出有些人的错误观点，这样开头比某范文网的模板式开头生动不少。
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（3）用数据描写现象+引出双方观点
【例】More and more people buy and use their own car. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh its disadvantages for environment?
【老雅范文】
Just 50 years ago, to own a car was quite a luxury, but today, cars have found their way into many households. Statistics show in China alone, there are over 140 million cars running on road every day. While cars have brought about conveniences to their users, they have imposed great pressure on the environment.
【评】引用具体个性化的数据来描写现象，比枯燥的辞藻更具说服力。
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（4）用具体事例来描写现象+拟讨论的问题
【例】City dwellers seldom socialize with their neighbors today and the sense of community has been lost. Why has this happened and how to solve this problem?
【某范文网】
In the current era, there is a phenomenon that urban residents are not eager to communicate with their neighbors and they do not have a sense of community. This essay may examine the possible reasons and potential solutions to reversing this tendency.
【老雅范文】
Now we have numerous newspaper reports about a child being robbed without anybody offering to help him or a ninety-year-old poor woman dead at home for days without anybody knowing it. All these reports point to one key problem that face dwellers in cities, especially big cities: they seldom interact with their neighbors, much less to say they care about their neighbors and they feel lonely because they do not feel they belong to any community.
【评】通过引用报纸相关报道，用具体事例来说明现象，让作文的开头顿时具有说服力。
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（5）通过把题目中的关键词具体化来描写现象+拟论证的观点
【例】People believe that using mobile phones and computers to communicate. Therefore, people are losing the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
【某范文网】
When it comes to the issue about the influence brought by the pervasive use of technologies, some people argue that devices like mobile phones and computers do not damage the ability to communicate face to face, but I cannot agree with this solution.
【老雅范文】
We live in a world where communication through modern technology such as smart phone and computer is so prevalent that it’s hard to go anywhere without seeing someone texting, emailing, writing blogs and tweeting. Of course the use of technology can be good. It provides us with faster, more efficient ways to communicate with others, but it can also harm our ability to communicate with people face to face.
【评】描写wide use of technologies时，将其具体化为"texting, emailing, writing blogs and tweeting"，使文章显得更加具体丰富，有个性，而不是那么干巴巴的了。
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